tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9052980104801928559.post8923772438425744182..comments2023-06-13T03:31:48.007-04:00Comments on CAMPVILLE: BurnedE.J. Connhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17345163836299495743noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9052980104801928559.post-33729487475980852722010-03-04T09:32:44.801-05:002010-03-04T09:32:44.801-05:00It's always a pleasure to read beautiful liter...It's always a pleasure to read beautiful literature - finding it by chance is even more exciting. [Since comments are moderated, here's a bit of feedback:]<br />I really like your characters, and for the most part the way you set them. But there is one thing I don't get: <br />So Mitch ran into Grace again, and they were both sort of "going in the wrong direction", at least for a while back in high school. This part is told with a light hand and the appropriate measure of passion. <br />Then, we get to eventually "see" Molly, who, I assume, is to be the central character of your plot.<br />Yet Molly is not quite filling this role. Rather than giving us a bit of her emotional state, she keeps (rather calmly) preparing the food, and establishes yet another character: Charlie, the farmer.<br />If we are to watch her from such great a distance, it'll be hard to relate.<br />[End of feedback]<br />I hope you kept going with this piece. I'm definitely looking forward to reading more of it.Gerryhttp://macostair.com/noreply@blogger.com